Saturday, April 9, 2011

Why we revise

From Draft Zero:

"I hope you learned something," Stasia said.

From the revision draft rewrite:

"I hope you learned enough to make that," Stasia gestured in the direction of Smith's now-stilled body, "worth it.

"Also, wipe your mouth. You still have his blood on your lips."

1 comment:

  1. Rewriting is its own special circle in Hell -- I totally agree. Also, I love this rewrite.

    Thanks for the behind-the-scenes peek. ~Ali